Review Introduction
Talent Scouting untuk PTN Baru dan Universitas di Wilayah
Indonesia Timur
Politeknik Negeri Nusa Utara
Tahuna, Sangihe, Sulawesi Utara
Review Intro-1:
Frets J. Rieuwpassa (Prodi: Pengolahan hasil
perikanan)
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Judul:
• Karakterisasi Sifat Fungsional Bioaktif-Peptida dari Teripang Hasil Ekstraksi Menggunakan Teknologi
Membran Ultrafltrasi (Characteristic of Functional Properties of Bioactif-Peptide From Sea Cucumber
Extration Using Membran Ultrafltration Technology)
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Saran/Masukkan
• Typo
• Hindari penggunaan istilah yang sama berulang-ulang. Kita dapat menggunakan istilah lain atau
kata pengganti yang maknanya mirip
• Sumber referensi terlalu “tua”: 1993, 1996, 2002, 2003. Gunakan referensi terkini yang relevan
sehingga peneliti terlihat memang mengikuti perkembangan penelitian bidang yang dikaji
• Kutipan: “Hasil penelitian membuktikan bahwa …” sebaiknya menggunakan sumber referensinya,
misalkan “Heru (2013) membuktikan bahwa …”
• Problem yang akan dikaji:
Review Intro-2:
Usy Nora Manurung (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
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Judul:
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Pemberian Ekstrak Rumput Laut pada Ikan Nila
Oreochromis Nilaticus
untuk
Meningkatkan Resistensi Terhadap Bakteri
Aeromonas hydrophila
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Saran/Masukkan
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Typo
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Key terms: Rumput Laut, Ikan Nila, Resistensi/Imunologi, Bakteri Aeromonas hydrophila
• Why?
• What the advantages? What the efect(s) of the bacteria to Nila?
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Judul kurang “menjual” (tidak menarik)
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Ada “hilang” koneksi yang menyambungkan antara ”penyakit”, “rumput laut”, dan ikan
Nila
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Apakah yang tertulis merupakan ”Introduction”, bagian dari “Metodologi”, atau kajian
Review Intro-3:
Gracia Ch. Tooy (Prodi: Keperawatan)
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Judul:
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Determinan Kinerja Tenaga Kesehatan di Puskesmas Daerah Perbatasan dan
Kepulauan
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Saran/Masukkan
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Data: Tenaga Kesehatan di Puskesmas
1 dari 4 masalah yang ada
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Lokasi: Daerah Perbatasan dan Kepulauan di Indonesia?
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Q: Apakah di negara tujuan studi ada unit kesehatan yang setara atau seluruh
data diambil di Indonesia? Berapa lama?
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Dukung dengan riset yang telah dilakukan terkait fakta-fakta masalah yang ada
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Fakta: ”85 orang
D3 = 63 orang, SPK = 22 orang” sebutkan sumbernya
Review Intro-4:
Jaka. F. P. Palawe (Prodi: Teknologi Pengolahan Ikan)
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Judul:
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Eksplorasi Olisakarida dari Hasil Laut sebagai Senyawa Prebiotik
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Saran/Masukkan
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Key terms: Olisakarida, Senyawa Prebiotik
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Q: Why olisakarida? What is/are the advantage(s)?
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Hindari penggunaan kata yang sama secara berulang dan kalimat yang terlalu panjang
(kalimat terakhir pada paragraf 1)
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Perhatikan struktur kalimat khususnya dalam penggunaan kalimat majemuk
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Perlu dibahas lebih rinci hasil/solusi dari penelitian sebelumnya
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Belum terlihat masalah apa yang terjadi dalam penelitian dan solusi apa yang akan
ditawarkan (termasuk hipotesis Anda).
Review Intro-5:
Stenly C. Takarendehang (Prodi: Teknologi
Informatika)
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Judul:
• Information Technology Infrastructure Security Standard in Rural Archipelago Territorial Area
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Saran/Masukkan
• Key terms: IT Infrastructure, Security, Rural Area
• Q: Why security aspect(s) in IT infrastructure so important? Why rural? Is it diferent from other
type of area?
• In statement: “Cost are cheap, No security standard, etc.” Need: Facts or prior research result(s) • What kind of security standard should we be implemented? references: research or experience? • Avoid this kind of sentence: “I already read research about security issues from Mr. X.”
• Avoid ego-centric pronoun
• Is the security awareness in government institution related to “rural area”? • Why don’t you ofer such kind of “design, architecture, or protocol of security
Review Intro-6:
Stendy B. Sakur (Prodi: Teknik Informatika)
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Judul:
• Acceleration classify data signal EEG using graphics processing unit (GPU)
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Saran/Masukkan
• Typo and improve your ”English” writings, but it is good start you wrote it in English (: Organize your sentence
• Key terms: EEG, GPU
• Q: Why we need acceleration? How to classify EEG? Why do you need GPU?
• You don’t need to write explicitly on the title, just write it in the body of your article as a tool Intro, Scope, or Methodology
• EEG signal or signal EEG? What do you think? (-;
• You need to “state” solutions of prior research on similar topics. What problem would you want to solve?
Review Intro-7:
Chatrina M. A. Bajak (Prodi: Keperawatan)
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Judul:
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Evaluation of Clinical Education Environment R
elated (to?)
L
earning
Experience: To develop more Efective Learning in Clinical Settings
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Saran/Masukkan
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Evaluation vs. Efective?
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Why CEERLE is so important?
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Note some prior research results on the introduction: problem
solution, limitation, methods, etc.
Review Intro-8:
Edwin O. Langi (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
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Judul:
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Growth Analysis of Commercial Sea Cucumber
Post Mutilation
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Saran/Masukkan
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Pair: “either … or …”; “neither … nor …”
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What problem do you want to solve?
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The idea is not clearly stated.
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What is the relation between: Commercial, Sea Cucumber, and (Post)
Review Intro-9:
Meistvin Welembuntu (Prodi: Keperawatan)
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Judul:
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Peer to Peer Mentoring Program
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Saran/Masukkan
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(Study, Design) on
Peer to Peer Mentoring Program
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Use variation of terms or similar meaning of terms, not always use the
same.
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Hypothesis: one of solution is “peer mentoring program”
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1-
group (which is applying peer mentoring program) vs.
control
group
(which is applying traditional model)?
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Give your attention on Grammar and Structure
Review Intro-10:
Stevy Imelda M. Wodi (Prodi: Mikrobiologi Pengolahan
Hasil Perikanan)
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Judul:
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Studies on The Structural Changes of Myoglobin and Identifcation of Bacteria
Produced Histamine in Big Eye Tuna (
Thunnus obesus
)
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Saran/Masukkan
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“Bigeye Tuna (plural?) are important fsh species …”
How important is it?
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”Mioglobin was water soluble protein that found in liquid muscle cell was changed to
brown”
How many sentence(s)? 1, 2, 3, or more?
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How about:
• “Mioglobin is water soluble protein founded in liquid muscle cell. It was changed to brown” • “Mioglobin, water soluble protein founded in liquid muscle cell, was changed to brown” • “Mioglobin which is water soluble founded in liquid muscle cell was changed to brown”
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Improve your structure
Review Intro-11:
Desmianti Babo (Prodi: Teknologi Budidaya Ikan)
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Judul:
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Nitrogen Fixation and Protein Formation by Azolla Cultured in
Diferent Nutrient Enriched and Infuence to Bawal Fish
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Saran/Masukkan
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“Indonesia is a rich country in natural resources. Azolla is one
inside”
give the fact!
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How about: “Indonesia has a diversity of natural resources. One of
them is Azolla (Heru, 2014).”
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There are many ”missing” connection within sentences or paragraph
Review Intro-12:
Darna Susantie (Prodi: Biologi Ikan)
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Judul:
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Some Aspect Biology Eel in Sangihe Island
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Saran/Masukkan
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Typo
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Improve your English structure!
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Why EEL? Why should it be conducted in Sangihe Island?
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You stated, “In
Sangihe island not yet
research about
specifc species
in
Sangihe
island.
• “Sangihe has a specifc species of eel but there is no researcher investigating it.” • Q: What is the diference of Sangihe island? Find the uniqueness of Sangihe’s eel!
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Time schedule is not necessary to state on Introduction. You may state it on
Review Intro-13:
Agneta Lalombo (Prodi: Keperawatan)
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Judul:
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(Studies on)
Teacher
Perlocutionary
Act and Persuasive Communication at
Classroom
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Saran/Masukkan
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Typo
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The use of pronoun:
• Avoid the use of pronouns in an academic writing: I, we
• Use appropriate pronouns: The authors, The researchers, They
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Problem(s) is/are not clearly stated, including the limitation
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