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1. 2 Finally, the contents … Reference
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There are many animation … Reference
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3. 3 … the question of how forms of … Proper word “What” instead of how
… the question of what forms of …
… role determined by series…
… belief then strengthened by myth…
Grammar mistake
determines strengthens
5. 4 On the other hand, the public … Reference
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7. 5 According to …
According to whom?
According to Burr
8. 6 research literature
What is research literature?
Revised: literature study
What is secondary data? Revised: additional data It must be clear, how many
episodes become the data sources Revised Mainstay
What is it?
Andalan
Not necessarily talking about these other animation here.
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… because it contains a lot of learning materials.
Reference?
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14. 7 .. resolved within the limits and ..
What is the limits?
… within the limits of child's acceptance and perspective.
The charge is…
What does it mean?
The content is …
16. 8 Material object used are Upin &
Ipin Season 1 and 2, Upin & Ipin dan Kawan-Kawan Season 3, 4, 5, and 6.
This should be stated in the method
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17. 13 .. series indicates no gender bias can be avoided in the entertainment media, even the learning media.
… that gender bias should be avoid in the entertainment media, especially the learning media.
Gender bias cannot be avoided, why?
If so, what is this research for?
Learning media should avoid gender bias contents.
It is paradox with the statement above
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1. 2 Audiences are required to be smart to receive and to respond toward television broadcasts. Being smart becomes important when it deals on children.
What are you trying to say?
What do you mean by “smart”?
Also, are you suggesting that
“smartness” is less important when not dealing with children. This kind of reckless assumptions and suggestions need to be rid of.
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The sentence is a quotation and concludes with a statement, "In this situation, parents’ roles are essential to be more active and wise in
accompanying their children when watching television."
Many people (in Indonesia) consider animation / cartoons films are for kids. This is a wrong assumption. There are many animation and cartoon films are not suitable for children. In this situation, parents’ roles are important for the development of their children.
Again, is this within the scope of your article? You need to be very selective about what gets included and not.
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The sentence is a quotation and concludes with a statement, "In this situation, parents’ roles are essential to be more active and wise in
accompanying their children when watching television."
Although not directly related to research, I quote it to explain the condition of television programs for children, especially in Indonesia.
children TV shows sometimes contain negative instructions How would you quantify this?
How would you qualify this?
“negative” and “positive” in this context are not
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On the other hand, children's TV shows sometimes assumed to contain
unaffirmative instructions; for example, the content is about the gender issue Humans are made up of men and
women. However, gender does not determine one's social status Really? For someone studying gender studies, this would come across as quite simplistic, don’t you think?
What do you mean? This is basically your argument.
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Sexually, human are made up to male and female. However, gender does not determine one's social status and activity.
5. 3 In this global era, human being should not be limited by their maleness and femaleness. Gender is human nature, but gender is not a barrier to human activities.
Conscious or unconsciously, gender differences are constructed socially by particular communities.
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People should not be limited to masculinity and femininity in their activities. Conscious or unconscious, gender differences are built socially by particular communities. However, the Upin & Ipin animated series appears to
Accordingly, the impressions…
Is there any era when it should be ok? If not, don’t limit it.
This is very debatable, has actually been debunked. There is a tendency for this part to be simplistic in its deliberation.
Why accordingly? How is it so?
contain fairly thick gender-biased content.
Psychologically, it will certainly…
Now, it’s another theoretical framework. Are you using it? Why is it included in this article?
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Psychologically (Burr, 2002; Islam &
Asadullah, 2018), this differentiation will affect the psychological
development of children. In the end, it will affect the social behavior of the child until adulthood.
7. 4 Gender bias in Indonesia…
How is this relevant? Be very concerned about what gets included.
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Feminist perspective in this research is looking at how big the dominance of men over women.
According reference (Abraham, 2016; Asmarany, 2007; Chin, 2018;
Endraswara, 2003), research within the scope of this perspective should explore further men domination of women with attention to traditional concepts that glorify (houses) women. This study should focus on women position and
underdevelopment of women from men in all aspects of life.
What does it mean, really?
Example of grammatical error What does this even mean?
Why? Who makes you?
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In addition to using sociological theory of literature, this study also uses a feminist perspective. Feminist perspective in this research is looking at how far the dominance of men over women with attention to traditional concepts that praise women. This study focus on women position and underdevelopment of women from men in all aspects of life (Abraham, 2016;
Asmarany, 2007; Chin, 2018;
Endraswara, 2003).
9. 5 That is, reject everything that is marginalized, …
chatty
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The goal is to balance feminist and gender interrelations, reject everything that is marginalized,…
… highlighted as person who hold on to religion in their daily lives.
is this definition of positive? The use of “positive” needs to be exercise with nuances and contexts
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11. 6 Overall the data obtained then interpreted within the framework and scope and feminist perspective.
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Overall the collected data interpreted
grammar
within the framework and feminist perspective.
12. 7 That is the excellence of Upin &
Ipin.
How can you argue of “excellence”
when it has not even been fully discussed?
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That is the differentiation between Upin
& Ipin compared with another animation program.
Audiences can easily recognize the figures only through the voice and speaking style or acting in the story (Putri, 2018).
Same question, is audience part of your research?
This sentence is a quote to explain the importance of character building to help audience understanding.
14. Indonesia should have product like this Upin & Ipin.
Are you proposing a recommendation in the middle of the article? This is not acceptable!
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15. 13 BIBLIOGRAPHY
What citation system is used? This is totally randomn!
It's not random. I use the APA quote system as required by the journal.
